My subconscious harvests the thoughts that were bypassed
They collect together in one place, and wait to be unleashed
Like a cougar awaiting on a prey, my dreams are lurking in the shadows
They find the perfect moment, to vomit the events that previously occurred
They are hidden messages, that I have to decode
My lessons are taught, in the form of an endless reel
The meanings behind this euphoric state of mind are hard to decipher
On the account that they were barely noticed by the fully engaged state of mind
The journey of dreaming is a long and exhausting travel
The lure of false hope drew me into the driver's seat
The aspirations of being more than the average individual
Convinces the soul to do more searching
A surreal state of mind is within arms reach
The desire to participate is reason enough
To surrender to the abyss of this eternal mystery
That was very intresting but don't forget to add the prepose and age group. The flow seemd a bit choppy but other than that its very well written.
ReplyDeleteVivid choice of vocabulary! Although, the rythm was confusing and difficult to feel. Maybe you could put emphasis on some words or phrases.
ReplyDeleteI like how you created a short story and still managed to create a rhythm even though it didn't rhyme
ReplyDeleteThis is what breaks my heart. To see a person with talent not keeping up with the work. :( Where are the other two poems?
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